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Sailim
, August 17, 2021
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Plymouth Undercover wanted to be a good story. Had a great plot, but just does not live up to its potential. The characters are pretty shallow and incredible. A wannabe actress chucks her “dream” to come back and take over running her father’s private investigation firm? She and her mother/partner immediately take on a missing persons turned murder case? No experience, no license – except for an 80-year-old employee (not partner, manager or owner of the company). It begs credulity.
Every step taken, sight seen, thought… thought is spelled out in full detail plus, with an over the top obsession with food. Details in a story help develop the characters or move the story forward, when there is a point to them. But when the “point” feels like the detail is merely to stretch the word count far enough to qualify as a novel rather than a short story, it is too much. That is the case here.
The narrator needs to learn how to narrate without gasping for air. Additionally, she sounds more like a starry-eyed child than someone who believes they are going to be a successful private investigator. There is no strength behind the voice. No drive, no determination. It verges on simpering – and is not pleasant or appropriate for the story. It reads more like a young high school student’s short story assignment submission that only managed to garner a C.
In all, it was neither a pleasant story nor listen.
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